Thursday, May 10, 2012

My Thoughts

My thoughts are like snakes.
Some lie still, basking in the sun
While others strike with quick precision,
Some move fast while others move slow.
Other thoughts burrow
into the ground
and I'm lucky if I'll ever see them again.

By Jordan

5 comments:

  1. Jordan,
    That's an amazing poem about your thoughts. Great imagery and an impressive piece of writing. You are right about some of your thoughts striking with quick precision! You have always been a quick thinker.
    I am going to miss having you at our school. I look forward to hearing about all the great things that you get up to and achieve in your learning and your life. I will watch the rugby when you are an All Black and say..."I taught that guy when he was a kid at Ngutunui!"

    Miss T.

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  2. What a fantastic story about your thoughts.
    Ka Rawe - awesome.

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  3. I love the way you told us about your thoughts of a snake, and the diffrent types of snakes and what they do. Ka mau te wehi Jordan.

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  4. Wow Jordan!! That’s a really good poem showing your thoughts. We loved the way you compared your thoughts to snakes. It’s a fantastic piece or writing but maybe next time you should check your punctuation/ spelling before you publish. Thanks for sharing, we’d love to read more!!

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  5. Wow that was really good Jordan-Christian Lachlan

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